Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, more countries aim to develop their medical,

education

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and

trade

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sector. Owing to

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people higher authorities of developed countries should help underprivileged countries. I personally agree with

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began with, developed countries like United States of America have high gross domestic product rate as well as their primary, secondary and tertiary sector are developed. So, they should focus on other countries who are developing or underdeveloped. They can help those countries in the

trade

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sector which

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sector, which

directly affect

there

of them or themselves

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overall income of the country.

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, most of the rich countries prefer to

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with other rich countries.

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of that if they make policies that their 25 to 30 % goods or products should be from poor countries.

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a recent survey

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policy than the poor countries economy will increase to about 9.8

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would be a great contribution from rich to poor countries.

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, the underprivileged countries

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have poor

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as well as

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sectors.

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also affects

these two sectors indirectly because if

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the economy

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they can improve the infrastructure of

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and

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areas.

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, in

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ares, the rich countries should give hands to poor countries. To exemplify, South Africa is

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underdeveloped country and there are many diseases, do not have

cure

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cures

and suitable doctors to eliminate that

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disease

. So, developed nations should send their experts to that

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to cure people. To encapsulate, though poor countries are trying to improve their nation.

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underdeveloped nations
economic disparity
global cooperation
moral obligation
historical exploitation
interconnected world
economic stability
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trade relationships
humanitarian aid
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dependency syndrome
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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree ot disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

Some people belive that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era as all writings can be stored electronically. Others think that printed books still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many people nowadays prefer online shopping. Is it a positive or negative development?

Some people think that the best way to succeed is to get a university education, while others disagree and say that it is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.