Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, more countries aim to develop their medical,
education
and
trade
sector. Owing to
this
ideology some
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ideology, some
people higher authorities of developed countries should help underprivileged countries. I personally agree with
this
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
and will describe my own prospective in forthcoming paragraph.
To
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Two
began with, developed countries like United States of America have high gross domestic product rate as well as their primary, secondary and tertiary sector are developed. So, they should focus on other countries who are developing or underdeveloped. They can help those countries in the
trade
sector which
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sector, which
directly affect
there
of them or themselves
their
overall income of the country.
For instance
, most of the rich countries prefer to
trade
with other rich countries.
Instead
of that if they make policies that their 25 to 30 % goods or products should be from poor countries.
Additionally
, in
recent survey
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a recent survey
recent surveys
, which depicted that if rich countries will follow
this
policy than the poor countries economy will increase to about 9.8
% which
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%, which
would be a great contribution from rich to poor countries.
Moreover
, the underprivileged countries
also
have poor
education
as well as
health
sectors.
However
, the above strategy
also affect
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also affects
these two sectors indirectly because if
economy
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the economy
of poor country will increase
then
they can improve the infrastructure of
health
and
education
areas.
Additionally
, in
health
ares, the rich countries should give hands to poor countries. To exemplify, South Africa is
a
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an
underdeveloped country and there are many diseases, do not have
cure
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cures
and suitable doctors to eliminate that
diseases
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disease
. So, developed nations should send their experts to that
areas
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area
to cure people. To encapsulate, though poor countries are trying to improve their nation.
However
, in
this
field elite
nations
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nation
can contribute
alot
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a lot
by follow above
mention
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mentioned
strategies and help them to build
there
of them or themselves
their
health
,
education
and
trade
areas.
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