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Band 5.5

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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The best solution suggested to eradicate
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traffic
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trafficking
 and
pollution
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 is to
increase
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 the cost of petrol.
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, an
increase
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 in the
price
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 of petrol does not promise a decrease in
traffic
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 or
pollution
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 created by vehicles. Petrol is a fossil fuel and must be used sparingly. In
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 a case, the
increase
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 in
price
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 to preserve the fuel seems noteworthy.
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,
rise
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a rise
the rise
 in the amount of petrol won’t stop people from commuting with their private vehicles. In turn, it won’t stop
traffic
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 on the roads and eventually there will still be
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pollution
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polluted
. People will
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lessen the intensity of; temper; hold in restraint; hold or keep within limits
curb
 to shell out extra money from their
pockets but
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pockets, but
 will continue to drive their vehicles
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 of opting for a public transport. The luxury of personal vehicles and space is far more important to human beings than the cash to be spent.
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: With a private vehicle one does not have to wait for the bus or train.
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 of focusing on a
price
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increase
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 to curb problems like
traffic
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 and
pollution
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, a green way should be thought of.
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: the use of bicycles in London in some parts of the country is the reason for least
traffic
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. In India, public service advertisements catering to switch off the engine while at the signal helps to restore fuel and stop emissions of various gases. Automobile companies are now seeking
solution
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solutions
a solution
 through electric cars, which run on electricity. To conclude, I am of the opinion that
price
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increase
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 isn’t the best way to solve
traffic
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 related problems
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 a wide range of other activities like cycling, frequent usage of public transport or mere walking should be encouraged.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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