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rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are plenty of debates for fees increment and
unemployment
 are revolving around the world. Some individuals are of the opinion that higher secondary schools should involve only practical
degree
 courses rather arts subjects in university curricula.
However
, I firmly disagree with
this
 view. On the
first
 side, it is
undeniable fact
Suggestion
an undeniable fact
 that, today,
unemployment
 and education fees are burgeoning.
To begin
 with, pupils would complete their education in less time as all subjects should not be taught during actual curriculum.
Thus
, university goers focus on only professional study because of they have to profound study in field subjects.
Moreover
, practical skills give excellent job opportunity which is
expectation
Suggestion
expected
 of all
degree
 holders. On the flip side, tertiary education is all about interest.
Firstly
, student have a wide range of selectivity in selection of subjects.
Individual
Suggestion
The individual
 has not
interested
Suggestion
interest
 in
degree
 courses and he or she
want
Suggestion
wants
 arts subjects
such
 as philosophy and history.
Additionally
, these
type
Suggestion
types
 of subjects are inextricably linked with our culture and economy.
In other words
, all students must know about
national economy
Suggestion
the national economy
 and ancient culture.
Furthermore
, wide range of subjects overcome flood of student in individual class
as a result
 detrimental effect on decorum of university classes. What is more,
myriad number
Suggestion
a myriad number
 of
student
Suggestion
students
 in
same field
Suggestion
the same field
 escalate an
unemployment
 rate. Companies have not ample space to involve in
organization
Suggestion
organizing
 and the onus of fees, which has been paid in all semesters, could not cover by salary. To conclude, there are lots of advantages of having only practical
degree
 courses. Despite, wide range of selection is dominated
unemployment
 rate, burden of fees and other pros of professional subjects.
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  • well-rounded education
  • critical thinking
  • innovation
  • cultural heritage
  • market forces
  • employability
  • educational diversity
  • practical degree courses
  • adaptability
  • long-term effects
  • societal impact
  • cultural enrichment
  • job market trends
  • interdisciplinary approach
  • fostering creativity
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