Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What actions can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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Today, we are living in a society based on consuming.

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leads to buying of unnecessary and

unaffordable

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products by few gullible buyers, who end up in

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an enormous amount

of debts. In

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essay, I will explain the reasons behind

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behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

and provide with possible solutions. Nowadays, there are certain factors which augment

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type of attitude.

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with, many companies have now socially engineered

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techniques which lure more buyers.

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, advertisements are manipulated, so as to portray that acquisition of their product might make some naïve people feel, socially superior to others.

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is purely psychological.

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, the

digitalization

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digitalisation

of currency has made it more difficult to manage the budget, as more people are drawn towards online shopping of unwanted products due the lucrative “Mega-sale” offers.

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, while the leasing policies have made it possible to buy certain things instantly, but people are often left unaware of the interest rates of the lease returns.

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unusual

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

of buying things piles up huge debts on certain people, making it a serious mental-health issue. In order to minimize

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habit, governments should offer

counselling therapies

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counselling, therapies

by health professionals. The manipulation of adverts which prevents the companies to tell the factual data, should be banned.

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, one should properly

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manage

his budget, by getting a correct idea of his income and number of purchases made. In conclusion, I think people should determine the usefulness of products beforehand, keeping in-view of their financial aspects.

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will not only avoid them from getting into

debts but

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debts, but

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prevent subsequent disillusionment.

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Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What actions can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people believe that students should be required to wear uniforms in school, while others argue that uniforms restrict individuality and self-expression. What is your opinion?

Employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress at work. They should only care about the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Disposing of waste on streets has become a common problem in many countries these days. What are the cause and solutions of this issue?