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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 we have a bar graph that quantifies the citizens of Canada who utilized social media
sites
 in two consecutive years 2014 and 2015. In general, maximum
Canadians
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of Canadians
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 were interested in using a single social networking site in both time periods.
However
,
people
 who loved using five
sites
 for social media communication occupied the least possible place in the same years. As a starting point, 36% of Canadians utilized one social site in 2014 which is followed by a slight decrease of 8% of
people
 in the following year. Followed by that, there is a minor decrease in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
people
 from 22% to 21% who rarely used social
sites
 , and only one more percentage of Canadians were using two
sites
 for communicating in 2015 than that in 2014.
In contrast
, the
numbers
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number
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 who liked using five
sites
 doubled from 2% to 4% between the years 2014 and 2015. As a final point, we can observe a slight upgrade in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
people
 who used three
sites
 and four
sites
 with an increment of 4% and 3% respectively.
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