As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. What are some job positions that may be lost because of computers? What are some problems that may result from this situation?

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It is irrefutable that technology has really helped man in various ways, but the

use

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of computers as a working device is gradually taking the place of humans in most occupations which will eventually give rise to unemployment in the society.

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essay seeks to discuss some line of work which can be replaced by computers and the downsides of

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replacement. Human activities are gradually fading out in most

maunfacturing

the act of making something (a product) from raw materials

manufacturing

and processing companies. Most of these companies now require the

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of computers in activities which involves processing, filling and sealing of a particular product.

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, mechanized farming is being practiced by a number of

famers

a person who operates a farm

farmers

, thereby reducing human involvement in the agricultural sector.

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, in medicine today, the

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of heart pacers to monitor a

patient

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patient's

heartbeat and the

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of robotics to perform major surgeries is gradually replacing the work of the medical practitioners.

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, in the area of banking, availability of cash machines and E-banking has reduced traffic in the banks and employment of more staff is in turn being discouraged.

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, there will be increased unemployment in the society as computers will now substitute humans in many job sectors.

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, leading to low standard of living.

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, some people may engage in criminal activities to make ends meet. As there are no income and means of livelihood,

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the crime rate

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an increase. In conclusion, relevant occupations are gradually being taken over by technology,

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individuals will be faced with

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a lack

of job opportunities and may

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succumb to criminal acts which

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a threat to the society.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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264 words

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As the world becomes technologically advanced, computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. What are some job positions that may be lost because of computers? What are some problems that may result from this situation?

Fully explain your ideas

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