Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Present day industrial sector
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The present day industrial sector
is getting concentrated mostly
to
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in
urban areas. While shifting of big factories and manufacturing firms in the outskirts of the huge cities may create opportunities for growth of infrastructure and employment in the rural villages near to regional areas, it can
also
create
economic burden
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an economic burden
on small scale industries. Major industrial setup requires additional development and construction
for
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of
the employer
othen
kitchen appliance used for baking or roasting
oven
even
Athens
than just the industrial area. While industries employ numerous workers, facilities are required for proper functioning of industries including roads, accommodation, housing, local markets, schools.
hospitals etc.
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Hospitals, etc.
Hospitals etc.
For example
, the industrial township of Faridabad located in the outer areas of the Indian capital city
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.
e
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E
New Delhi, has
population
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a population
of over 20
lakhs
with all the infrastructure required for
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
of basic needs of workers and their respective families. Creation of industrial setups in the rural areas straight away creates job opportunities for people from nearby villages. Due to ease of
accesibility
the quality of being at hand when needed
accessibility
from the nearby villages, employers give priority to people from adjoining places to work in their
industries
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industry
.
For example
, In Faridabad Industrial town 60 percent of workers come from nearby villages while later 40 percent belongs to people from other parts of the country. Working
of
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in
big
industruies
the people or companies engaged in a particular kind of commercial enterprise
industries
largely depend on several small scale industries which assist them for raw materials. Shifting of big industries to distant places will straight away hamper the financial costing required for transportation of goods.
For example
, in year 2018, small scale industries of Jodhpur suffered a major downfall in their
economy
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economic
due to shifting of major industries outside the town. With the rapid growth of economy in developing countries, it is becoming almost impossible to keep
industrial sector
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the industrial sector
concentrated to cities only. Though
such
changes create negative impact on
small percentage
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the small percentage
of
country's population
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the country's population
a country's population
, it is beneficial for a large mass of people who gets direct benefits
from
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of
such
changes.
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