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In order to solve traffic problem, government should tax private car owners heavily and use that money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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Congestion is a main issue in all big cities. Some people think that
government
 should tax private
cars
Suggestion
car
 owners in order to improve public
transportation
 and diminish
traffic problem
Suggestion
the traffic problem
a traffic problem
. In
this
 essay we will discuss why taxing private car owners is not a solution.
To begin
 with, being a commuter is not possible for everyone. Indeed, some workers begin their jobs very early making the use of public
transportation
 difficult or even impossible.
For instance
, a baker needs
to begin
 preparing bread at dusk and will not be able to arrive at work
with
Suggestion
by
 public
transportation
, because, in most cities they do not ride at that time of the day.
Secondly
, a great amount of citizens
live
Suggestion
lives
 far away from their company, for many reasons like buying a house is cheaper or because they want to enjoy the quiet of the suburbs. They made that choice to enjoy their life, and by making them using the public
transportation
, they will
waiste
spend thoughtlessly; throw away
waste
 their time
in
Suggestion
on
with
 it and not enjoying quality time with their families.
On the other hand
,
government
 needs to find a way to improve public
transportation
 and make them more effective. Many people living in the cities could abandon their habit of riding their private car and using public transport if they would get subsidised by the
government
 or received
pay increment
Suggestion
a pay increment
 from their employers. To sum up, I disagree tha
t
Suggestion
the government
government
 should overtax private car owners becaus
e the rich
Suggestion
the rich
er will once again benefit from a two-speed system letting less wealthy people struggling with public
transportation
 problems
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