Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that is individual's responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Undoubtedly, over consumption of sugary foods is detrimental to our
wellbeing
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well being
.
Consequently
, it is thought by some that the lawmakers should be responsible to curb the intake of sugars by the people. Others,
however
, believe that it is the individual's duty to reduce the quantity of sugars he or she consumes. In my opinion, I consider that the government is in the best position to curb
this
trend because they have the authority to enact strict laws on company producing high
sugar
content products. On the one hand, some people have suggested that
government
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the government
should be responsible to benchmark people's
sugar
intake and I agree.
Firstly
, legislators can impose
constringent
a gathering of persons representative of some larger group
contingent
laws on production companies that manufacture
sugar
related products.
This
is because the problem of eating too much sugars starts with the companies that produces them.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
NAFDAC, a food regulatory body in Nigeria, provided a guide
on
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to
for
the maximum
sugar
level to be included in each product before release to the public.
Furthermore
, if lawmakers allow the people to consume much
sugar
,
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,
it will result in health issues
such
as diabetes and obesity. In the long run, treating these problems could result in allocating more funds into the health sector which could be invested
into
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in
other sectors.
On the other hand
, other people opine that it is the individual's duty to restrict the amount of
sugar
to eat
.
Accept space
.
The reason for
this
is that people can decide to consume whatever he or she chooses. They have access to the products, either in shops, at workplace or at school. So, to purchase and eat
such
products is their decision.
Moreover
, they feel the pains of any consequences that might result from taking too much
sugars
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sugar
.
Hyperglycemia
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Hyperglycaemia
,
for instance
, is associated with frequent rigour, excessive sweating and
polyuria
especially at night. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I believe that government should impose precautionary measures in controlling people's consumption of sugars because it will serve them from spending more money on the health sector.
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