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Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think that is individual's responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat

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Undoubtedly, over consumption of sugary foods is detrimental to our well being.
Consequently
, it is thought by some that the lawmakers should be responsible to curb the intake of sugars by the people. Others,
however
, believe that it is the individual's duty to reduce the quantity of sugars he or she consumes. In my opinion, I consider that the government is in the best position to curb
this
 trend because they have the authority to enact strict laws on company producing high
sugar
 content products. On the one hand, some people have suggested that
government
Suggestion
the government
 should be responsible to benchmark people's
sugar
 intake and I agree.
Firstly
, legislators can impose contingent laws on production companies that manufacture
sugar
 related products.
This
 is because the problem of eating too much
sugar
 starts with the companies that produces them.
For instance
, NAFDAC, a food regulatory body in Nigeria, provided a guide for the maximum
sugar
 level to be included in each product before release to the public.
Furthermore
, if lawmakers allow the people to consume much
sugar
,
Accept space
,
 it will result in health issues
such
 as diabetes and obesity. In the long run, treating these problems could result in allocating more funds into the health sector which could be invested
into
Suggestion
in
 other sectors.
On the other hand
, other people opine that it is the individual's duty to restrict the amount of
sugar
 to eat
.
Accept space
.
 The reason for
this
 is that people can decide to consume whatever he or she chooses. They have access to the products, either in shops, at workplace or at school. So, to purchase and eat
such
 products is their decision.
Moreover
, they feel the pains of any consequences that might result from taking too much
sugar
.
Hyperglyceamia
Suggestion
Hyperglycaemia
,
for instance
, is associated with frequent rigour, excessive sweating and
polyuria
 especially at night. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I believe that government should impose precautionary measures in controlling people's consumption of sugars in order to avoid spending extra fund in the health sector.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
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