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Some say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group acitivities in their free time. Others say that this is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Part of the people say that organised
group
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 activities must be encouraged among kids during their leisure
time
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.
On the other hand
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, some say that the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 should learn self-play as well. We will discuss both opinions in detail in
this
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 essay. In today's world, the size of every family has drastically reduced. Every child in earlier days had the kids in
same age
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the same age
 as their cousin.
This
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 provides opportunity for weekend activities and
group
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 play with family members. In
current world
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the current world
, people migrated to different parts of the country and the kids are confined to smaller families with just father, mother and kids. They do not have options to
regulary
in a regular manner
regularly
 meet their cousin and spend quality
time
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 with everyone.
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 lead to the new age
were
In or at or to what place
where
 people connect with other families within the community and a larger
group
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 of kids have the opportunity to play and get to know each other. During leisure
time
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, kids must spend
time
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 in organised
group
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 activities like story reading club, visit to the zoo, etc. The organised activities will encourage the kids to know new people and spend
time
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 with the other children as well.
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 will help them to channelize their energy in the right direction. Based on a recent study by Cambridge, kids who participate in
group
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 activities have improved their analytical skills.
Besides
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this
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 opinion, some people mention that, it is critical for kids to self-play. It is not always possible to have
children spend
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children, spend
time
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 with
playdates
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 and other events. During free
time
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, kids should self-play to keep them engaged. It is difficult for any parent to keep kids busy all the
time
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. The Self-play will help kids to imagine and improve creative thinking. Due to weather conditions, outdoor play id not feasible, so the kids need to stay at home. At
this
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time
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, younger kids should take
time
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 to occupy themselves with books (or) toys available at home. In my view, organised
group
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 activities
is most required
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are mostly required
are most required
 for every child at
this
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time
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.
This
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 will help
the kids to provide
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provide the kids
the kids provide
 an outlet
from
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for
 the social pressure and
also
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 get to know more friends. It will make them to be active throughout the day, due to the joy which they get from playing with other kids.
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