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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society?

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Mr.Jason: These days,
majority
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the majority
 of students don’t prefer to choose the subjects related to
science
 which can be so harmful for the countries. I will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 all the parts of
this
 topic and at the end give my own opinion.
Firstly
, it’s fact that
science
 subjects are so tough to acquire which is preventing students from choosing them.
Similarly
, it takes a huge period of time to learn
science
-related subjects, because they are rather complex and have deep meaning which confuse all the people. Another reason is that, the students don’t have a personal tendency to select
science
 subjects,
such
 as mathematics and physics, because they are extremely boring and time-eating. In fact, there are some visible impacts on the society which may occur if the students stop studying
science
.
First
, the changes in different fields will stop taking place, because
science
 can be seen in different fields of study, and insufficient number of scientists will lead to collapse of mentioned spheres. That’s why it is obvious that,
science
 is the key to change and brighten our
life even
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life, even
 if it is more difficult than other subjects.
In addition
, some health-related problems will increase and cannot be solved, as the scientific research is the key to resolve them nowadays. And
therefore
, scientific subjects are
crucial every
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crucial to every
 part of the world. To sum up, it is undoubtedly fact that when the students stop going into the subjects that are in
science
, there will be gobs of problems.
For instance
, some research about health issues and in terms of changes will automatically stop. So, we should preserve the
science
 and motivate the students to select that.
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