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These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In recent times, most of the families are settling in overseas countries for career advancement. It is often preferred by the section of the society that settling abroad becomes beneficial for the children, whilst others do not support and think it will lead to have a problematic life for them.
This
 essay will discuss on both the sides of the arguments as there are widely differing views on the issues.  
To begin
 with, people moving to other countries for their professional
growth
, brings in several benefits for their children.
In other words
, they get good schooling and career opportunities.
In addition
, it
also
 enhances their lifestyle and helps them to know more about the different culture and traditions. To exemplify, an Indian who completes the education from abroad may have more value, which may support in long-term career
growth
.  
On the contrary
, there are people who believe that it will be difficult for children to settle abroad mainly because they will have to compromise their comforts and security which will be challenged.
This
 not only affects them psychologically, but
also
 has an impact on their
growth
.
Furthermore
, they may take time to get familiar
to
Suggestion
with
 the new environment and culture, as young generation do not easily adapt to relocation.
For example
, it is a human tendency that they might take some time to adjust the new environment after relocating.
Further
, there could be additional consequences in regards with language barrier, racism, and lifestyle. Taking everything
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 consideration, I am inclined to believe that moving abroad will bring in tremendous benefits to young people in terms of both personal and professional
growth
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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