Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Over the
last
decades globalization
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decades, globalization
has increased. People are opting for
adventure
travelling rather relaxing. There are both pros and cons of
adventure
travelling, we will discuss both in details.
Adventure
holidays
has taken
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have taken
place of relaxing outing. Nowadays people are choosing
adventure
travelling like mountain trekking, desert safari, river rafting, travelling to
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
and so on. Risk travelling not only enhance
confidence
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the confidence
of the
person but
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person, but
also
provide courage to stay aloof. It
also help
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also helps
has also helped
to survive with minimum resources and enrich persona of discipline. Thrilling experience attracts all ages from young youth to old people. It
also
enhances
economic status
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the economic status
of that town. It provides necessary employment to locals when
town
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the town
a town
become
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becomes
tourist attraction
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a tourist attraction
. Trekking on a difficult mountain
enrich
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enriches
feeling of exhilaration. When one
reach
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reaches
has reached
the top of the mountain where no other person has yet reached gives
feeling
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a feeling
of pride to trekker along with his nation. The curiosity of exploring unknown places
encourage
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encourages
people to travel
such
danger
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dangerous
places.
Such
curiosity allowed Columbus to discover unknown islands. To achieve difficult task is enthralling feeling which can only be
experience
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experienced
.
Conversely
, there are cons of the difficult travelling.
Such
trip may not go as planned. There are many mountaineers who had died during high peaks due to lack of oxygen.
Also some
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Also, some
adventurer
have survived
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has survived
unrecoverable accidents were left bedridden. If someone
go
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goes
missing during trips than state might have to initiate
expensive search
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an expensive search
for
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to
look out of
such
traveler
a person who changes location
travellers
.
Hence
there are positive as well as negative of
adventure
travelling. But still curious human will continue to explore and conquer the world.
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