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Science could help people live up to 100 or 200 years. Would it be a good or bad development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the advent of technology, folks could have a
longer
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long
life
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 of 100 or 200 years by inventions in science. While some opine that
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 is a negative development that could be a predicament to the family members, I believe that
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 benefits the people living longer with a sense of purpose in their lives. On the one hand, masses with a
longer
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long
life
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 could get benefited in many ways, the most specific one is being able to
fulfill
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 their bucket list would give them a sense of purpose and completeness in their lives before they expire.
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, nowadays, people are extremely busy working and earning to reach the family needs with no
time
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 to think about themselves, while they reach the
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 to think, they are suffering from maladies. Whereas, if they live longer, they could be able to have quality
time
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 for themselves and live with exuberance towards the ending days of their lives.
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, in my perspective, advancement in science by increasing the length of human lives is undeniably advantageous to all.
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,
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 the benefits of
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 phenomenon are numerous, there are a few drawbacks in
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, the most prominent is
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dependent
 on their offsprings. It means, older people living longer need to depend on their
children which
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children, which
 would bother the family members as almost all are working with no
time
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 to look after the elderly people. To conclude,
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 there are a few disadvantages in the development of science to increase the
life
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 expectancy of the masses,
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 advancement could certainly benefit the folks to have a complete
life
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.
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