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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve the environmental problems unless individuals make some action Discuss both views.

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It is often considered that individuals alone cannot solve the environmental problems. While,
government
Suggestion
the government
 is
also
 equally responsible for eliminating
this
 problem. With regards to individual, they can actively participate in plantation programme conducted in
community
Suggestion
the community
.
This
 could inspire
massive number
Suggestion
a massive number
 of youth towards preserving environment which results in reducing environmental problems to some extent.
Secondly using
Accept comma addition
Secondly, using
recycle
Suggestion
recycled
 plastic bags for shopping is another step towards minimizing
environmental problem
Suggestion
the environmental problem
.
However
,
individual
Suggestion
the individual
an individual
 alone cannot solve
this
 problem unless there is collaboration from
government level
Suggestion
the government level
. Deforestation endangers the habitat of flora and fauna. So from national level those
culprit
Suggestion
culprits
 should be put behind the bars and penalty charge should be incurred.
Furthermore
, mixing of sewage and drainage in the water resources should be stopped immediately. Despite of
this
, alternative ways should be introduced.
Moreover
, those industries and factories which emit toxic gases should be punished legally. As it
create
Suggestion
creates
 a detrimental
effects
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effect
 on our surroundings.
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