The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?

There are three reasons why I think increasing the rate of young offenders is not only by improving parenting skills.
First
, societies have duties to care for teenagers. The whole of society has a duty to help prevent teenagers from committing crimes. Television shows should limit violent scenes because teenagers are easily influenced by these programs, and they are not mentally mature enough, and they will follow the examples to commit crimes.
Therefore
, the negative
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
does not implant to the teenagers’ consciousness.
However
, many shows are full of violence and crime.
Next
, students lack the education. If schools fail to instill them with correct
morality but
Accept comma addition
morality, but
emphasize studies repeatedly, they will gradually lose interest in learning.
Moreover
, schools should open law classes to help students understand what will happen if they break the law.
Finally
, young offenders most come from dysfunctional families. Those teenagers who live in single-parent families feel neglected and may easily develop bad
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, and young people
can not
can not
cannot
change
such
as these environments. In conclusion, societies, schools, and families are very important to young people, so they should pay more attention to children.
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