The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last 20 years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion,

It is considered by some that

involvement

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the involvement

of married women in work has created

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problem

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the problem

a problem

problems

of juvenile delinquency. But I totally disagree with

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view. On one hand, nurturing is not

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the only task

of women. As, both parents are equally responsible for

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. While

womens

an adult female person (as opposed to a man)

women

get engaged in

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the work

they could ease

financial burden

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the financial burden

of

family

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the family

families

as well.As a consequence, their offsprings shouldn't have to worry about

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the financial crisis

and be more concentrated towards their study. One of the main

reason

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reasons

for the juvenile delinquency might be the broken family. Since, it negatively impact

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on

child development as well.

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to it, they

lack

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proper supervision

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of

their parents.

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,

lack

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of moral behaviour among children has

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increased

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problem

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.

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: In a society where honesty is highly valued.

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to it, truancy can be considered as

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a major step

for the emergence of

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problem

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.

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Even though

, youths are aware about

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major

consequences

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consequence

.

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, they

are often seem

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often seem

to be

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neglected

towards their

study which

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study, which

hamper in their career as well.

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,

lack

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of communication between parents

are

introduces an alternative

or

children are another hindrance to

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problem

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. Youths feel more comfortable to spend

there

of them or themselves

their

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time

with friends rather than with their parents. Not only

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, parents

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do not make

effort

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an effort

the effort

to interact with their children. If teenager

lack

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proper

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guidance, then

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they might get victim of

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problems. In my view,

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the mother

alone cannot be only blamed for

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problem

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. Apart, from

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ethics

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ethic

taught by parents play a crucial role in tackling with

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type of

problem

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: In past

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days we also

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we had heard

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type of news.

In conclusion both

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In conclusion, both

parents should prepare youth to become self-reliant so that they could cope with any kind of hurdles.