The government should invest more money in teaching science than in other subjects for a country development and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many believe that
government
should spend more revenue in
field
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a field
the field
of
science
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scientific
study rather than other area.
However
,
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,
I think in
overall
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the overall progress
progress
of the
nation
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national
government
should focus on each and every
field
of learning
.
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.
Some are in favour that
government
could spend
there
of them or themselves
their
money mostly in
field
of
science
study
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studied
because they believe that
this
is the only way
,
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,
which assist in country
progress
.
Nowaday
,
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,
s
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so
we are living in
modern world
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a modern world
the modern world
and everyday we encountered with the new discoveries and inventions.
Therefore every
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Therefore, every
country
need
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needs
to be
masterize
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mastered
masters
moisturized
in
science
and technology studies.
Thus
lead to success.
On the Contrary
,
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,
I believe in order to get nation
progress
,
government
should concentrate on not only in
field
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the field
of
science but
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science, but
also
in other fields like arts
,
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,
political
science
and so on.Undoubtedly
science
is one of the crucial
field
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fields
to ensure country
progress but
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progress, but
it doesn't mean that we can neglect other areas.
For example political
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For example, political
science
and sociology
,
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,
which is an important subject should be taught particularly those want to become
a
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an
efficient leader.A good leadership is vital for any
nation success
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successful nation
nation successful
.
Thus it
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Thus, it
is important for
government
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the government
to concentrate on every important
areas
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area
. To sum up I
am not completely agree
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do not completely agree
have not completely agreed
with the idea that
government
should not solely invest
there
of them or themselves
their
money in
science
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scientific
study.
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