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In many countries, workers over 60 can still be found in the workplace. However, some people think that this may cause social problems and they should be retired. Do you agree or disagree?

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In many parts of the world, employees that have crossed the
age
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 of 60 are still employed and are part of the workforce.It is a belief amongst a few individuals that cultural issues happen due to late retirement.In my opinion, people should not push themselves to
work
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 after the
age
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 of 60.In my
upcomming
of the relatively near future
upcoming
 essay I will elaborate more on why 60 should be the maximum
age
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 limit to
work
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.
Firstly
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, people who are still working after the
age
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 of 60, are usually
burdon
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burdened
burden
burdens
 to the
society
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.They are the root
to
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of
alot
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a lot
 of social problems without knowing about it.
For instance
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, as soon as someone retires from a job, a fresh, young energetic individual will take his or her position. With that job he or she can start a new life
,
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,
get married have kids etc.
This
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 helps
society
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 to grow and reduces the negative
preasure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
pressures
 on our social system.
Secondly
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,
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,
God
didnot
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did not
 make us to
work
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 our entire life.Elderly people must not exceed
work
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 after they reach 60 years of
age
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.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 will give them more time to spend with their kids or grandkids, and obviously add years to their life.Another compelling reason is that retirement at the right
age
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 paves the way for
new generation
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a new generation
new generations
 to practice their
curriers
the particular occupation for which you are trained
careers
.
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, elderly people who still
work
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 are more prone to
work
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 related accidents. In fact, their recovery time from an accident
increases
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increase
 due to
age
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.
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, In
indonesia
a republic in southeastern Asia on an archipelago including more than 13,000 islands; achieved independence from the Netherlands in 1945; the principal oil producer in the Far East and Pacific regions
Indonesia
 rice pickers are still working at the
age
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 of 70.A lot of them are
victums
an unfortunate person who suffers from some adverse circumstance
victims
 of back injury and other ergonomic related problems. In Conclusion
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I honestly believe that social and cultural problems
from
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of
for
 our
society
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 can be eliminated, if
workers
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the workers
 are retired at the
age
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 of 60 years.
This
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 will give more time to the elderly to spend with their families and community
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,
Hence
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 removing social issues
from
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of
 the
society
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.
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