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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today's world, subject like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is contrasting view among people about the notion that whether
history
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 is one of the crucial
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subject
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subjects
 in the school or
science
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 and
technology
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 are vital for students.
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History
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, which provide people the information about how they come to the present state
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is taught in almost all the schools and is considered as one of the crucial
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 by many people of the society. There could
be myriad of reasons
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be a myriad of reasons
 for
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having such a view
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 view.
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,
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 is associated with the dignity of a
nation
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,
for instance
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, Nepal, the
country
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 which fought
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 its sovereignty with the county Britain: the
country
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 which try to colonize Nepal. Student learning
such
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 things
give
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gives
 them the feeling of patriotism and to do something for
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 in
future
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history
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the history
 taught society about
different steps
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the different steps
 that particular
nation
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 has taken and whether
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 move was fruitful for for that
country
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 so, it
well
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 be
good lesson
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a good lesson
 for any
nation
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 to make various
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 decisions.
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, in 19’s
Nepa
a small landlocked Asian country high in the Himalayas between India and China
Nepal
 did “ Sugauli” treaty with Britain and that agreement has been a dark till
this
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 period of time for that
nation
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. No doubt that
nation
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 will think many times before
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
 any agreement like that in
future
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.
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, other people in the society do not take
history
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subject
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 seriously
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 rather they believe
science
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 and
technology
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 are
subject
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 to boost a
country
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 rapidly in
future
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. They do have floods of beliefs for prioritizing
science
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 and
technology
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subject
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subject, such
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 as
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,
 at
first
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 it is due to the
technology
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 that today's modernization is possible, so if people want to
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 make a big step in
science
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 and create a more comfortable life
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,
they must focus on
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subject
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subjects
a subject
the subject
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to
technology
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. At
second
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they think it is actually a waste of time for the students who are inclined towards
technology
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 to read about
history
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 rather they could spend that time to
further
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 widen their depth of knowledge in
technology
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. In conclusion, I believe both
history
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 and
science
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 and
technology
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 subjects are equally important
subject
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 for students.
Although
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people
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peoples'
peoples
 belief
history
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 is vital for making
future
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decisions but
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decisions, but
 they cannot ignore the significance of
technology
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 to develop a
country
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.
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Similarly
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, without
core knowledge
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the core knowledge
 about how a
nation
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 come to the present sate through the knowledge of
history
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sometime there is difficulty in making a right pace for
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future
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the future
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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