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These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Migrating to foreign countries for a better
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life
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
style
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 is becoming a common phenomenon these days. Families are migrating to foreign countries, to provide
better lifestyle
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a better lifestyle
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 their children and earn a decent economy for stability. Some argue
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 helps their future generation, while others believe
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 will create more problems.
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 essay will discuss both views and provide my opinion on how it affects families migrating to other countries.
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 one hand, people in developing countries are transferring to US, Canada, UK,
Australia etc
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Australia, etc.
Australia etc.
… as they have advanced
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 and are a greater sources of
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,
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 had an increase rate of 30% in
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 three years.
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, as these countries are already well developed in social,
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style with good and
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with good style and
 advanced culture.
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, benefits like free education to children, free medical insurance to the citizens of those countries are drawing interest in many to migrate.
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, few believe that earning for 2 to 3 years in these countries would be equal to 10 years of
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 in their home country.
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, few people believe that migrating to these countries will greatly effect on the younger generation, as children of these families will face challenges in accommodating to the new culture,
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 and it will have a high impact on their education when compared to their native country. In my opinion, people with children born on foreign land will be feeling it a tougher task if need to migrate back to their homeland, as it will be difficult to adapt to the tradition and
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. In conclusion,
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 migrating to foreign countries may benefit in earning more, there will be challenges in regards to family traditions and
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. One has to consider all the possibilities before migrating.
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