Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programes (for example working for a charity, improving the nighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). What extent do you agree or disagree?

In out sophisticated society, people who
are engaged
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engage
with community services are highly evaluated. While some people believe that even high
school
students should attend activities that help local environment become better, I strongly believe that they shouldn't be one of compulsory
programes
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
.
Firstly
, students in high schools are usually very busy. They tend to have more tasks from classes and need to concentrate on those academic works to get into better universities.
Although
I acknowledge that some claim that students can still assist some
comunity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
aids
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aid
groups after schools, the problem is that those activities could only make them tired and keep them away from
school
works. Another reason that the activity should not be compulsory for secondary students is that some of them are already engaged with income generating activities after
school
and they tend to be very busy and exhausted already. Even though I concede that working with other people,
such
as local people can be a good experience for teenagers, but the problem is a lack of time. Some adolescents need money to help their family rather than charity works.
Finally
, my strongest argue is that high
school
children need more sports and cultural activities rather than
comunity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
work experiences. A lot of them are under academical burnout and need
place
Suggestion
places
to outlet their stress in a healthy way by doing what they like with their peers. Having decent hobbies is far better
to
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for
adolescent development in my opinion. In short,
although
unpaid community service could provide students a good vocational experience with locals, they tend to be busy academically.
Therefore
, I do not agree that free community activities should be compulsory for students in secondary schools.
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