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Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Other believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense.

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In recent times, changing of the hosting
country
 holding international sporting events has sparked great debated whether those nations spent their
money
 appropriately or not.
Although
 some people say that doing
this
 wastes huge amount of
budget
, I do believe that each hosting
country
 gets more in return equally. On one hand, holding a great sporting
events
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event
 requires
great amount
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a great amount
 of
money
.
This
 is because the
money
 is spent on preparation, ceremony and transportation for other participating nations; in the contrary, the
budget
 could be used for helping citizens and improving
economics
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the economics
instead
.
For instance
, a
latest
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later
 study found that in the past hosting nations have spent at least 200 million Baths for holding an Olympic game.
However
, I feel that every
country
 gains international income more than the
budget
 that they had spent on
sporting
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sporting events
a sporting event
event
.
On the other hand
, transferring
event
 hosting role every time is the best way that equally allow nations to reap benefits. By doing so, the
event
 brings lots of
money
 to the host. A strong reason for
this
 is that there are thousands international people who attain the great
event
;
moreover
, they spend their
money
 here.
Furthermore
, the
event
 provides
valuable chance
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a valuable chance
 to promote the
country
 and to gain international people’s attentions.
For example
, a news said that the host
country
 regularly gains 2 times additional income after the
event
.
Consequently
, I agree that the
event
 creates an equal opportunity to become well known and to get more international income. In conclusion, even if international sporting events let the host nations
to spend
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spend
 huge amount of
budget
, it gives an opportunity for those countries to become well-know and to gain more
money
 afterwards.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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