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People generally know that the environment is essential. However, most individuals still don't take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment. Give reasons for your answer or include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Environment plays a vital role in the healthy
living
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lives
 of human beings. Despite the fact of the importance of the situation, numerous concerns have aroused due to the careless actions of human beings
such
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 as deforestation and air
pollution
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 are
few
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a few
 of the reasons to blame it. Both these views shall be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, due to the selfishness of human being deforestation has boomed by hurting our environment. To illustrate
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, people cut forests to construct houses to accommodate the needs of overpopulation.
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 the shelter is essential for every human being, the background should be considered equally. In my view, the Government should permit building houses in open areas, away from
greenery
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the greenery
. Research has proved that plantation activity in society had added awareness of changing environmental issues.
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, air
pollution
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 is another cause of environmental issues. Due to the rapid phase of life, every individual seeking advance transportation to commute daily.
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,
instead
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 of walking or riding bikes to work, people prefer to reduce
pollution
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 by cars to save time and effort.
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, the sequential use of motor vehicles has a substantial negative impact on the environment. Government authorities should introduce
carfree
free of trouble and worry and care
carefree
 days regularly
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 of annually.
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, people get the regular practice of avoiding car usage and replacing it
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with problems
 other transportation.
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, WHO proved that the annual event of the international car-free day had highlighted the numerous benefits that included a minimal change of reduction of
pollution
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. In conclusion, deforestation and air
pollution
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 are regarded as a cause of environmental issues, and people held responsible for it.
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, implementing safety measures daily will minimise environmental issues.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental responsibility
  • sustainable choices
  • green practices
  • eco-friendly
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • recycling programs
  • environmental awareness
  • conservation efforts
  • climate change mitigation
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