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Nowadays , many schools find it profitable to sell unhealthy food and sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks . is this a positive or negative development .

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Nowadays
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 schools build up their own food courts and restaurant for their students Many of the schools found that it is very profitable to sell foods and drinks which are unhealthy and they sell sugary drinks to students during lunch breaks
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To begin
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 with the major aim of education
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an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
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 they primarily focus on the reputation of the institution for that
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 they train their students and motivate them to earn a good academic background. In order to achieve
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For that
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 they build up their own restaurants and
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 they restrict the use of outside foods. In
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 the school management focus profit from the restaurant too. So these may affect the quality of products.They sell fast foods
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junk foods
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sugary drinks
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continuing in the same way
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 A research conducted by health department found that, the primary cause of children's health problems
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 those foods
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those
cusines
the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared
cuisines
casinos
 which contain added colours and sweets causes chronic
diceases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
disease
 like stomach problems
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 obesity
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colestrol
an animal sterol that is normally synthesized by the liver; the most abundant steroid in animal tissues
cholesterol
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 etc. It is true to say that
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 soft drinks
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fried items and highly contagious foodstuffs are
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Another survey conducted by
student's union
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the students' union
students' union
students' unions
 found that the bottled water and some ice creams that served are manufactured from pond water. To elucidate
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 schools must be careful about theses kinds of carelessness which may seriously affect the reputation of their institution. As a suggestion
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 they can replace unhealthy foods with natural fresh juice, vegetables, salads
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 coconut water etc. Meanwhile, the authorities should check the physical condition of their student to avoid obesity.
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, these institutions can earn more goodwill in front of the society.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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