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Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some people that popular
leisure
 activities nowadays are mostly influenced by fashions rather than realistic needs and interests. I partly agree with
this
 statement, and
this
 essay will assess both views giving some relevant examples to acquire a proper conclusion.
Initially
, there are countless activities which have appealed to the population for so many
years regardless
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years, regardless
 of any public trend or fashion. Take reading books,
for example
. Almost all people are interested in reading, and they start to read a wide range of books of various genres only after do they learn
alphabet
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the alphabet
 in schools. Doing exercise would be another example.
This
 is an undeniable statement that exercise is the best provider of what people need to keep in shape. If a person wants to pursue a healthy lifestyle, he definitely incorporates a kind of exercise (e.g.
yoga
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Yoga
, jogging, swimming, etc.)
in
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In
 his pastime. Seen in
this
 light, people are enthusiast by many
leisure
 activities far from trendy. On the flip side, there are some activities which are
directly
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directed
 according to public tendency, and
this
 is because the modern world presents us with a new entertainment every day. Considering the Internet and mass media, people follow different applications, and attend to virtual forums according to their popularity. A personal example would be that, I was incredibly obsessed with FACEBOOK two years ago while I am extremely active on INSTAGRAM nowadays, because it is much more famous in society, and enables me to contact with almost all of my friends.
Therefore
, there are some particular
leisure
 options which are changing day by day. Altogether,
although
 some special entertainments are trendy, there are many options for spare
time which
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time, which
 have been popular for us and our grandparents’ generation. I am of the opinion that prominent
leisure
 activities profoundly meet people’s needs.

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