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8.D. In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by the international fast food. This is having negative effect on our families and societies. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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In
this
 era of technological advancement and globalization, all spheres of life have changed dramatically, and
food
 is not an exception. I agree that international
food
 and restaurants have taken over traditional foods and cuisine, and
this
 has severe negative impacts on our societies and families. There are significant negative impacts exerted by international fast
food
 to our family.
Firstly
, these international fast foods have serious negative consequences on family bonding. Previously family members sat together on a dining table to have lunch or dinner. Everybody shared
well
a raised mark on the skin (as produced by the blow of a whip); characteristic of many allergic reactions
weal
 and woe of daily life which strengthens the family connection and bonding.
However
, because of the easy availability of fast
food
 nowadays, family members are accustomed to eating these foods alone within their busy work schedule.
As a result
, they need not sit together for dinner, which affects their family bonding.
Moreover
, the art of home cooking is
also
 fading away because of our preference and over-consumption of fast
food
.
In addition
 to the above, our society is
also
 affected by the widespread availability of fast
food
. Traditional
Food
 is inextricably connected with the
culture
 of society. As traditional foods require time to produce, fast foods are taking place of traditional
food
 in
this
 fast-paced world that leads to the death of our thousands of years old
culture
 and tradition.
Furthermore
, International fast
food
 is promoted extensively in every place because of which local
food
 companies are facing a huge challenge to sustain in
this
 competition.
Thus
, local people, local
culture
 and tradition in society are adversely affected because of
this
 western
food
culture
. To conclude, international fast foods are affecting our family bonding considerably, and
also
 force our traditional
food
culture
 to die.
Thus
, fast foods have negative repercussions on our families and
societies
Suggestion
society
Submitted by Masudur Rahman on

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