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More and more students choose to move to other oversea countries to have the higher education. Does the trend bring more benefits than disadvantages? What is your opinion?

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The number of students who choose to study abroad has increased tremendously in recent years. In my opinion. Studying oversea brings more benefit than problems. It is true that students may face problems
such
 as language barrier and culture shock which can lead to homesick and mental health problem, especially for those teenagers who still finding their ways to know
this
 world.
However
, several approaches can lead to the settlement of these problems,
such
 as arrange
underaged
not of legal age
underage
undergrad
 students to host family or provide mental health care. Despite the disadvantage mentioned above, I believe that there are some benefits to study in a foreign country.
Firstly
, it is an opportunity to practice one’s language in both oral field and academic field, leaving the circumstance of one’s mother tone and living in a foreign country can force people to use another language.
Secondly
, moving from one country to another and gain
knowledge there
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knowledge, there
 can widen one’s vision, with different education system and new study methods people can acquire an open mind and accept newly invented stuff more easily. These two benefits can not only help students to develop communication skill but
also
 encourage students to think in a different manner. In conclusion, from my point of view, the major advantages to students help them develop skills far outweigh the minor disadvantages. With
skills
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the skills
 and knowledge they gained oversea, students will be more competitive in
job market
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the job market
.

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