Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

The use of certain chemicals in producing and preserving
food
, has become a source of concern in our society today. In my opinion, I agree that there are some significant benefits associated with
this
practice
such
as
increase
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an increase
in shelve life and cultural belief and acceptance, but
this
trend has some drawbacks like sickness and physical body
burn
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burns
.
Accept space
.
Admittedly, one of the demerits of the use of chemicals in
food
production and preservation is that it is a major
causes
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cause
of ailments
such
as cancer, heart conditions, organ failure and
athsma
respiratory disorder characterized by wheezing; usually of allergic origin
asthma
.
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.
For example
, 80% of cancer cases in American, is
as a result
of consumption of foods that uses chemicals as preservatives.
In addition
, most chemicals
causes
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cause
physical damage
such
as body burnt, if not properly handled.
For instance
, bakery workers at some point would experience
certain degree
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a certain degree
of burnt
as a result
of their exposure to poisonous chemicals.
Nevertheless
, a major benefit of
this
practice is
increase
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increasing
in shelve life of certain products
.
Accept space
.
Most
food
producing organizations
,
Accept space
,
would prefer products that can stand the test of time, without perishing easily.
For example
, Genesis
Food
,
Accept space
,
a dominant force in
hospitality industry
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the hospitality industry
in Nigeria, uses ethanol in the production and preservation of their cakes, bread and burger.
Furthermore
, due to cultural belief and acceptance, locals from South Eastern part of Nigeria, uses chemicals
such
as potassium to thicken their traditional delicacies.
Food
prepared with potassium is widely accepted as a staple
food
in that part of the country. In conclusion, while the use of chemicals causes diseases and skin damage, its merits
such
as longer shelve life and cultural acceptance are more significant.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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