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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduatesbhave led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history and only offer practical degree coursesbthat maximises chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People have different perceptions towards the subjects taught in higher studies. Some propose that tertiary
education
 should focus to get good job opportunities and not include art subjects while others oppose it. Personally, I strongly disagree with the former opinion. There are myriad of reasons why university teaching should not be limited to practical degree courses. Actually, tertiary
education
 is allowing a person to do in-depth study about a particular subject training to become a professional. In fact, every subject has its own value and importance, it is not a good act entirely to look down on the art subjects even in the era of science and technology. The essence of higher
education
 should not be affected by the current popularity of
employment trend
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the employment trend
.
With
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In
 reality, the fame and success of people who finished their degrees
with
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in
 art subjects should not be overlooked. Though today's world is dominated by scientists, the work of philosophers and their role is not disappearing at all as thoughts and ideas for mental wellbeing are still important in whatever era. If a person is confident and qualified, chance of getting jobs could not differ a lot among job applicants graduated degree like history and practical subject as
computer
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a computer
computers
. To conclude, in my opinion, the core value of university
education
 should not be judged against the contemporary employment pattern. I think that an effort of a person is more important to achieve a job rather than disputing over the types of qualifications and certificates.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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