People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

People living in large cities face tremendous problems due to the over population of the area and the facilities available can't go round. So it's result to competition and trying to manage the resources available. In my own view
government
should encourage people to live in smaller cities by providing the necessary infrastructure for
them which
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them, which
will make them not to think of going out to big cities. In big
cities there
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cities, there
is overcrowding already. If
th small
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smaller
the small
the smaller
the smallest
cities have facilities that make life more comfortable and meaningful those in big cities may come back to small cities.
Also
for
worker
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working
in
government
jobs, they should be
giving
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given
extra package as a form of incentive for them to want to stay in small cities.
Also if
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Also, if
free education and medical can't be free in
small
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smaller
cities,
government
should
subsidized
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subsidize
them.
This
will
also
encourage people to stay in small
cities especially
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cities, especially
young couple who
are just starting
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is just starting
to build their family. I
government
can do all these things, people will like to live in small cities.
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