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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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Food
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 production and preservation is a major issue today
as a result
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 of the
use
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 of chemicals. In my opinion, major drawback
such
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 as the
effect
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 on the
health
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 of consumers
outweights
be heavier than
outweighs
 some of the benefit it brings. Admittedly, one of the major
advantage
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advantages
 of the
use
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 of chemicals in
food
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 production and preservation is helping to prolong
food
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 shelf like and makes it readily available to consumers. Today one can walk into any store and get a readily made foods that can be consumed immediately or that requires microwaving. As
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, time and energy need to prepare
such
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food
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 can be invested in doing other things.
Nevertheless
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, the major drawback of the
use
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 of chemical for
food
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 production and preservation is the long time
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 it has on the consumer.
Chemicals
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The chemicals
 used are
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hashed
 on
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 consumers and can lead to
health
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 issues
such
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 as
cancer among
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cancer, among
 others because
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this
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these
those
 chemicals attacked the immune system. A research published by WHO in the year 1996 concluded that foods preserved with chemicals
such
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 as Benzoates and Sulphites are detrimental to the
health
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 of
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 consumers and will likely lead to cancer.
This
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 clearly tells how great the
effect
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 of the
use
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 of chemicals can be. In conclusion, while parts of the advantage of using chemical include long shelf life and easy availability of
such
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food
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,
it
it is
it's
 major drawback which is
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
effect
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 on the
health
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 of
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 consumer is of great importance and should not be neglected.
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