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Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is clear that in the recent debate on whether the government should condemn the lawbreakers to jail or give them
education
 and job
tranining
activity leading to skilled behavior
training
 does not seem to come to an end any time soon.
Although
prison
 sentences may dispel the idea of
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
commuting
 crimes of offenders, I would contend that other alternative
punishiments
the act of punishing
punishments
also
 play a vital role in combating crimes. It is understandable why many people advocate the idea of sending the criminals to
prison
.
First
,
prison
 sentences may act as a deterrent to other would-be offenders. In fact, behind bars means loss of freedom and separation from the loved ones for a long time,
therefore
 people will think carefully about the consequences before
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
 a
crime
.
Second
, serious criminals should be kept away from the community to protect the well- being of society. Only if murders or rapists are in
prison
, the citizens may feel safe when they are walking on the street and work effectively without the fear of becoming a victim.
On the other hand
, from my perspective, it seems to me that other options like
education
 or vocational training should be suitable methods, especially with those who are young or commit
misdemeanors
a crime less serious than a felony
misdemeanours
misdemeanours'
misdemeanour's
crime
. The primary reason is that
education
 may change the wrong-doers’ attitude towards morality and thought in a positive way.
Instead
 of feeling resentful or unpleasantness in the cell, the offenders may be aware of obeying the law and become a good citizen after released. Another significant rationale is that the root cause of committing a
crime
 derived from lack of knowledge or poverty.
For example
, a person is likely to be forced to become a burglar or a robber due to the lack of money.
Therefore
, providing occupational training may help them earn a living and satisfy their
need
Suggestion
needs
 and they would no longer have
motivation
Suggestion
the motivation
 to
reoffend
cause to feel resentment or indignation
offend
. In conclusion, imprisonment may be beneficial in reducing the
crime
 rate, I would argue that
education
 and job training are effective ways to deal with crimes and both forms of punishments should depend on the age and type of
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rehabilitation
  • Recidivism
  • Reintegration
  • Vocational training
  • Incarceration
  • Deterrent
  • Correctional facilities
  • Reformative justice
  • Social reentry
  • Ex-offender
  • Criminal justice system
  • Restorative practices
  • Penal system
  • Social marginalization
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