Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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available because it's very expensive. The essay completely
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with about statement because of the benefits of free medical camps,
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the consultation and equipment
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costly. The essay first will look at the benefits of a camp and
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the treatment and why it is expensive. First of all, I believe that every province to provide a free medical facility is a significant way to predict issues. It's a good approach to
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health related
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people
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healthy.
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, poor
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diagnosis
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don't know how to become healthy.
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also
provide free health checkups and
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health insurance policies
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Canada and
UK
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has free medical for all diseases and diagnosis.
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technology is gradually emerging, but provinces are in below poverty
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of
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problems.
Due to
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the state governments
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able to provide all facilities for all treatments.
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need to go
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countries for
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treatment
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it's
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on
people
and government.
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, recently one of the news
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conducted
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and released an article. It's mentioned a few countries facing financial
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medical fully.
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, despite the financial circumstances government
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medicals but not fully. If
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overcome the
challenges
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medical fully it will be helpful for all poor and middle-class
people
.

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