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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.

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The world consists of wide varieties of people with different mentalities. So, their choices regarding their careers
also
 differ. Some professionals prefer being in the same Organisation throughout their working lives. Whereas, others prefer changing their jobs with time. Both decisions have their own advantages and disadvantages. It depends on the priorities, which one set in its life. The category of people who choose to not change the Organisation will develop better networks within comparatively.
Moreover
, they gain the trust of the Company, which in turn, help them to be
in
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on
 the priority list for most of the thing. Whereas, those people who prefer changing their jobs frequently give the reflections of unreliability.
In addition
 to it, they are not able to form that much good network at their workplace because of
short term interaction
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the short term interaction
. Organisational trust is questionable for
such
 candidates. Sometimes, changing
job
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jobs
 from time to time helps in gaining vast areas of knowledge and it goes
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 with economical benefits
also
 as there are so many companies who are ready to pay enough for outstanding skills and knowledge. But, if the person is staying in a same Organisation throughout the
life
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life, then
then
 economical growth is limited
relatively
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relative
. Of course, employees can climb the ladder with a very high
pace but
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pace, but
that is
 not the general case. In my view, it is better to stay in the same Organisation as clean and clear knowledge can be gained about the Organisation. And people under
this
 group come in front in the list of most trustworthy candidates with good contacts in markets on which Organisations rely. Economical benefits can be achieved in
this
 case too together with other benefits mentioned above, if the person is performing
outstanding
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outstandingly
.
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  • Corporate ladder
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  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
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  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
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