The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
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The first bar chart gives an analysis of the
number
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of divorces and marriages in the USA over a period of 30
years
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from 1970 to 2000,
while
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the
second
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bar chart shows the marital status of American citizens in the
years
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1970 and 2000. From the
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it is clear that
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the
number
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of marriages in that country showed a declining trend in the period under review,
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the
number
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of divorces over the given period remained more or less the same except in 1980 when it showed a hike.
This
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decline in the
number
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of
marriage
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marriages
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is evident when data for the
years
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1970 and 2000 are compared. It can be seen that the
number
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of divorces in the USA from 1970 to 2000 remained
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steady
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million
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except for the year 1980 when
this
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figure
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touched nearly one and a half
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.
On the other hand
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, the figures for marriages showed a downward trend with two and a half
million
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couples getting married in 1970 to two
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couples doing the same thirty
years
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later. When the marital status of Americans is analysed, it can be seen that 70% of the adults were married in 1970
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this
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figure
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was 60% in 2000. Meanwhile, in the year 2000, 20% of the adults remained single
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this
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figure
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was 15% for the year 1970. It is
also
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seen that the
divorced
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number of divorced
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individuals were less than 5% in 1970,
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in 2000
this
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figure
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was nearly double when compared to 1970.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, years, million, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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