Many people now take extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing.why do people risk their life's in this way,and do you think this is a good trend?

Now a days many people are keeping their life's into a risk by doing extreme activities
such
as bungee jumping,
paragliding
Suggestion
Paragliding
and mountain climbing.
This
essay will discuss the reasons of
this
trend and
finally
argue
whather
introduces two alternatives
whether
weather
water
it is a good idea to do.
Firstly
, most of the people are doing
such
extreme activities due to
attraction
Suggestion
attract
and
also
for relaxation.
some
Suggestion
Some
of them do it for getting a break from normal lifestyle and to forget their
unmemorable
too numerous to be counted
innumerable
memories.
For example
, most of the people are
love
Suggestion
loving
to take
such
activities for relaxation.
However
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However, such
such
kind of activities
keep
Suggestion
keeps
the man into a risk.
Secondly
, In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
is not a good trend because it may keep human into a
death sometimes
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death, sometimes
because the gear and gadget's are not safe and it is hard to trust man made equipments.
For example
, a man in England is very attractive to
this
extreme activities.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
he
choose
Suggestion
chooses
to climb up the mountain using the rope. But the rope has cut down in the middle which leads to the death.
This
shows that even people are showing interest in
such
activities it
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activities, it
is not so good for their life.
Finally
, getting a
rela
Suggestion
relaxed
x from normal lifestyle is
good bu
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good, but
t doing
such
an extreme activities keep the human life into a risk which results in death in so

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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