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Alcohol consumption has increased dramatically over the years. Some people believe that the government should increase taxes on alcoholic beverages but others oppose to this idea and advocate personal responsibility . What do you think ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

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Despite the knowledge that
alcholic
characteristic of or containing alcohol
alcoholic
 beverages are a potential killer, there has been
lateltly
in the recent past
latterly
 a soaring
demadn
request urgently and forcefully
demand
 on
such
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 drinks in the
last
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 few years.
As a result
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, governments should implement strict laws, by applying increasing taxes on
such
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drinks
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drinks, for
for example
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,
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,
 in order to seize the phenomenon of their
overconsumption
Suggestion
.
First
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 and foremost, wine is the root of all evils. Drunk people
can not
can not
cannot
 accomplish their commitments towards their society in a proper way.To clarify, it is scientifically proven that it takes about six hours to make the drunk get rid of
alcohol
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 effects and become sober. So, the overall national income will be adversely affected.
In addition
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 to that,
alcohol
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-addicted people will cost the
counrty
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
county
 massive funds in terms of healing diseases resulting from
such
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 addiction.
In other words
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,
alcohol
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 consumer represents burden on the society rather than an added value. All the governments have to ponder about how to deal with that dilemma. One feasible approach
caould
requests polite permission
could
 be achieved by applying progressive levy
,
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,
year after year, on all the liquors.
This
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 could help in making some wine consumers to rethink of their daily needs of
alcohol
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.
Accept space
.
 In another way,
this
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 could help the
governmnts
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 to raise more money to be invested in other aspects of life in case the consumption of the
such
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 drinks remains high.
Thus
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, it is in the interest of the public and
alcohol
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-addicted citizens that spirit drinks should be widely fought and banned.
Moreover
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, it is
worthy
Suggestion
worth
 to consider all the negative effects resulting from
alcohol
Use synonyms
overconsumption
Suggestion
.
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