The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The bar chart illustrates the
total
free Change the adjective
totally
time
, spent in a week by the
people of different Correct article usage
apply
occupation
during the year 1998 to 1999. The total Fix the agreement mistake
occupations
time
measured
in Add a missing verb
is measured
hours
per week. Different occupations are full
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full-time
time
, part
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part-time
time
employed, unemployed, retired and housewives
.
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housewife
Overall
, The unoccupied and past employees spend more time
, which is almost equal. It is obvious, In women full
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full-time
time
employee has less leisure time
compare
to Change the form of the verb
compared
part
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part-time
time
employee. There are no males, in part
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part-time
time
employment. The other category housewives,
account to
The Remove the comma
apply
third
among the five. Females
have a number of free hours
compared to other
.
Correct pronoun usage
others
Firstly
, the jobless male has spent more number of
leisure Correct quantifier usage
apply
time
, which is around 84 hours
, followed by ex-employee gents they account for 83 hours
and similarly
78 hours
spend
by Change the form of the verb
spent
females
in both levels, who spend almost the same and second
largest in
Change preposition
apply
overall
.
Secondly
, In part
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part-time
time
and housewives
only Add a comma
,housewives
females
are females are
falling into Remove the redundancy
apply
this
profession who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
accounts
for 40 and 50 Wrong verb form
accounting
hours
respectively. Lastly
, working professionals has
little free Change the verb form
have
time
which makes up 43 hours
for males and 37 hours
for females
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours, part, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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