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In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays in
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Nowadays, in
cities people
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cities, people
 would like
live
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to live
single
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singly
 or in a small family
then
 live in a big family. What the advantages and disadvantages. Living in a big family means that your children will
growing
Suggestion
grow
 in traditions and
on
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
an
 experience of adult generation. When you live with your
parens
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parents
 they can help you with
financial part
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the financial part
,
for
example you
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example, you
 shouldn't pay for rent of the flat and for food.
Additionally
, you can
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
 the time for preparing food and cleaning the house, via they take some of homework on there.
However
, If you live with your parents, you should act like they suggest. The less duties you have, the less right you have. Living alone let you make your own
decision
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decision, for
for
example in
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example, in
 weekday planing and in planing
a vocations
an auxiliary activity
avocations
. You would be able to spend your free time exactly for your children and husband/wife. Compering all plus and minus of living in a small and big
family we
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family, we
 can conclude there is more advantages of living in a big family. It held you to
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
 your money and time for more important thing like growing your children.

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