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University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that, students in
tetiary
coming next after the second and just before the fourth in position
tertiary
 institutions should study courses assigned to their discipline rather than include other subjects. In my opinion, individuals in college should concentrate on their specialized course to give them an indebt knowledge of their
specialty
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Specialty
 and prepare them squarely
for
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in
 the outside world.
Firstly
, no
one
 becomes a professional in a certain
field
 by studying
series
Suggestion
a series
 of courses
,
Accept space
,
 thereby
one
 gains deep knowledge of a discipline because of the consistent installation of the know-how to the individual.
In other words
, to achieve professionalism, students in universities should focus on the subjects relating to that
field
.
For example
, a set of 5 students discovered that
overtime
Suggestion
over time
 people who graduate from
school
 and become creative in a certain
field
, are individuals who solely studied subjects relating to their
field
. Another point to consider, is that the challenges encountered in a particular
field
 after graduation can be
summounted
having something on top
surmounted
summoned
, if there has been consistency in the study of the courses related to that discipline.
Moreso
United States rock singer (1943-1971)
Morrison
, the issue he or she
faces maybe
Accept comma addition
faces, maybe
 similar to what was experienced in
school
 while being taught the course. In 2018, World Discovery Humans (WDH) found out that 98% of people who solve problems in a particular
field
 easily, are individuals who focused on those kind of subjects while in
school
. Thereby, posing lesser or no problems for them when they start working. In conclusion, there is an ongoing controversy that
school
 students should pay full attention to the courses assigned to their department while others disagree
to
Suggestion
with
this
. I strongly believe that
one
 must concentrate deeply on the subjects relating to their course of study because of how it prepares
one
 for the future and creates awareness for the individual in that
field
.
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