Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or the antartic. What are benefits and disadvantages for tourists to visit such places?

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Nowadays, travellers are paying visits to
deserted
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desert
regions. As much as there are many advantages to doing
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there are
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drawbacks which include the period of draught experiences there and extreme cold which can lead to death. One major benefit of tourists journeying to the Sahara desert and
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
is to gain
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in debt
and verified knowledge. People who give true stories are the ones that experience the situation firsthand
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what the travellers do.
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, it helps them in developing write-ups for future references without
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people visiting the place to know more. One major drawback is that
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deserted places experience very harsh weather conditions, thereby making it tough for human beings to cope there. When the sun has reached its peak, draught can set in. Getting water is
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a dry land is near
impossible especially
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impossible, especially
if one has exhausted all the reserves taken there.
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More so
, due to the unbearable atmosphere it creates
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when excess cold sets in, blankets and places of shield are difficult to get
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causing survival to be tough and
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can lead to death.
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, it was discovered by a scientist in 1990 that 97% of people who embark on visits to secluded places rarely
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come back
alive. In conclusion, there are numerous drawbacks attached to tourists who go to places extreme weather conditions,
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, it has fostered and helped to develop truthful researches without individuals who refer to it in the future worrying about embarking on any trip to know how verified the story is.
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