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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages.

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
Most of the Foods we purchase and consume are processed by the use of chemical substances
otherwise
 known as additives or preservatives. In my opinion, while there are some setbacks of
this
, its many benefits
such
 as spoilage reduction is a major factor to consider. Admittedly, a major consequence of preservatives is that it has allergic reactions in a few.
That is
 to say that some individuals could have skin irritation, headache, palpitation and selling.
Consequently
, some may experience digestive disorders
such
 as diarrhoea and intestinal upset.
In addition
, there could be serious health issues
such
 as cancer and lung disease. These substances could trigger already existing health condition.
For instance
, I once met a patient who had breast cancer and
this
 was worsened
as a result
 of consumption of uncooked noddle’s Spice.. These
clearly shows
Suggestion
clearly show
 the demerits of chemically preserved food.
Nevertheless
, there are
benefits
Suggestion
the benefits
 of keeping food safe with chemicals as compared to the drawbacks. One of
this
 is that it makes food
last
 longer and retain
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
, taste and
favor
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavour
. In
otherwise
, it preserves the fresh need. A recent study by a group of microbiologists has shown that, it reduced the risk of infection because Foods can
last
 longer without contamination. Another positive
side
Suggestion
side to this is that
this
 is that it provides nutritional benefits. It
also
 saved cost for both the producers and consumers. In conclusion, while part of the cons of preserving Foods with chemicals include heart problems, its numerous
gain which
Accept comma addition
gain, which
 is healthy Foods makes it better than any demerit it has.
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