In many countries today, people buy a range of household goods ( television, microwave, oven and rick cookers) Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, a great number of electric appliances were used in household,
such
as television, microwave, oven and rick cookers. The impacts of it should be considerate. Personally, I think the positive effect is more than the negative effect. The major advantage is that the high technologies of those appliances provide people an efficient live.
For instance
, using the wash machine
is saved
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has saved
saves
time in cleaning clothes. If the wash machine was not invented, people need
do
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to do
all processes by themselves, include putting water, adding laundry powder, cleaning clothes, which spend hours.
However
, the machine
release
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releases
people’s hands by doing all the steps in an auto way.
Therefore while
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Therefore, while
the devices do their job, the time which was not enough to wash clothes could be spent on multiple things. As the result, the living efficiency of
live
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life
is improved.
On the other hand
, when more and more electric equipment
are used
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is used
in
house
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the house
, the using of electric power would increase, and most of electric power is produced by fuels.
Consequently
, that growth will add the CO2 in
environment
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an environment
the environment
, which is the main reason of climate changing,
such
as global warming.
However
,
this
situation would not
last
for long when nuclear which is replacing fuels becomes important as energy resources.
For example
, the electric that powered by nuclear in France was doubled in ten years, So the disadvantage of it will lower in future. In summary, I think while the negative impact of numerous household goods (television, microwave, oven and rick cookers) is decreasing, the positive side of it is more.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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