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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Although
 newspapers and television (TV) are the most accessible ways to broadcast news, these channels tend to have a low appeal to young adults. The cause of low
interest
, generally, can be attributed to the way the news is delivered either in written form or presented
on
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with
 visuals. In
this
 essay, the cause of
low
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the low interest
interest
 of news by young adults, and how it can be solved will be discussed. There is a myriad of reasons why young people
maybe
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may be
 disinterested with
news
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the news
.
First
 and foremost, young people follow interesting stories, yet most news in newspapers
are written
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is written
is writing
to
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for
 a diverse audience, from young to old.
This
 means language used must be able to be read by all ages, which compromises the
interest
.
For example
, newspapers use formal language, which may be difficult to read. While it may be good
to
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for
old
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older
 people who over the years have acquired advanced vocabulary,
this
 may be a challenge
to
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for
 young people.
Furthermore
, news on TV take longtime being presented.
Although
 the content may be diverse, the time they take to
present
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the present
 is considered to be long by young adults. Considering the low
interest
 by young adults, the delivery of news
have
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has
 to be tweaked.
Instead
 of having long presenting times of news on television, captivating news headlines with well thought use of video will improve
interest
.
In addition
, the written media can use simple English, and the stories must be short and precise. Having
channels particularly
Accept comma addition
channels, particularly
 targeting young people, where they have the same news toned down to their level, will
also
 help. Since low
interest
 in news
by
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of
 young adults is prevalent, attempting to change how the news is delivered both on TV and written media will help to increase
to
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in
interest
. Presenting times can be shortened, written news can be simplified using simple English, or even having dedicated channels or newspapers that report news at their level, are all possible solutions for
this
 problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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