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universities should give the graduates with knowledge and working skills which are needed in the work place.

#universities #graduates #skills #work #place
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The University programs are designed based on their faculty
knowledge
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 in present days.
This
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 way of teaching is
competely
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 beneficial for the University
management but
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management, but
, it may not be useful for
students
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students'
 job purpose.
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, Universities should give the pupils with
knowledge
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 and working skills which are
mandetory
required by rule
mandatory
 in the
task
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 place. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss how the
knowledge
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 and skill are important for the graduates in
job places
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the job places
.
Firstly
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, subject
knowledge
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 makes student to perform their
task
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 without obstacles. When University
send
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sends
 the students with perfect subject
knowledge
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 that helps the pupils what the main function of
particular
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particular works
the particular work
a particular work
work
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.
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, not only
theoritical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
knowledge
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 but
also
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, practical
knowledge
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 which is provided by the University helps the graduates to perform their
task
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 completely and
sucessfully
with success; in a successful manner
successfully
 at
work
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 place. Turning to skills, which should teach by the University that turns employee into a team leader. While, coming to
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task zone
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the task zone
completely
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complete
work
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in
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on
 time is not only
important but
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important, but
,
also
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 dealing every situation in
professional way
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a professional way
 is
also
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 major thing.
However
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, these communication skills are
tought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 by faculty
this
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 is one of the major responsibility of Institution program. Because, when
student
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the student
a student
 is studying only subject is not only thing,
teacher
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teachers
the teacher
 should teach them what is the society outside college. To conclude, the major responsibility of the University is to graduate the pupils with
knowledge
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 and communication skills. I think, that helps the student to manage their career perfectly and
also
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 can play their role in
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work area
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the work area
 without drawbacks.

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