The graphs show the number of books borrowed from four village libraries
The line graph represents the number of
books
borrowed from West Eaton, Rye
Slip, Sutton Wood, Church
Mount. It is interesting to note that, Correct word choice
and Church
while
the count dropped at Rye
Slip, villages West Eaton and Church Mount surged up in the time frame.
In detail, while
300 books
were borrowed at Rye
Slip which was the highest among the four villages, it declined to around 170 books
by September. On the other hand
, West Eaton and Church Mount witnessed an upward trend starting off at just 50 books
in July to
150 Correct word choice
and to
books
during September. Meanwhile, however
, Sutton Wood faced a dramatic dip of reaching a scale of 100 books
in August, but it managed to reach a peak of 300 books
thus
overcoming its initial stage of 250 books
.
Focussing on the genre of books
borrowed,43% of votes have been casted
for Fiction followed by Biography(19%). Correct your spelling
cast
However
,History(14%),Science(14%) and self-help(10%) sums up to a total of 38%.
It is clear that
Fiction is the preferred type of books
being rented. Fix the agreement mistake
book
Also
, except Rye
Slip, the three villages have better rental rates.Change preposition
for Rye
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, rye with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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