People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to over come it? The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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Above
illustrated
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is illustrated
illustrates
chart graph
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chart, graph
shows the age of 65aged
peple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
in 3 different
country
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countries
between 1940 to 2040.
during
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During
1940 the
population
of 65aged people was less than 10%.
as
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As
after 20years it
popuated
furnished with inhabitants
populated
purported
increased age to 10%,
then
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Then
again
in
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at
20years
population
age
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any of many shrubs of the genus Rosa that bear roses
rose
raised
risen
upto
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up to
10% or equal to 15%.
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In
19780 USA's
agd
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
aged
urged
people becomes 15% of
whole
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the whole population
population
,
thn
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
think
in 2000 there was a change as it % got reduced to less
tha
conjunction used in comparatives
than
that
to
15
%
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%, then
then
it has maintained its record
upto
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up to
2020 but there is an
apredivction
that USA will have 65aged
pepke
a broad highway designed for high-speed traffic
pike
more than 20% by 2040.
in
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In
sweden
a Scandinavian kingdom in the eastern part of the Scandinavian Peninsula
Sweden
they have more than 5% 65aged people in 1940 later in 1960 that number risen
upto
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up to
1960, and after 20yaers
sweden
a Scandinavian kingdom in the eastern part of the Scandinavian Peninsula
Sweden
has reached 15% of the total
population
in 65aged people, in 2000 total aged people
was
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were
less than 20
% but
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%, but
by 2020 it will reach 20%, and there is
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a
prediction that it
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
reach it % by 25% by 2040
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In
japan starting the aged people were
les
used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs
less
than 65
%
and they
ave
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
maintained
thier
of them or themselves
their
graph till 1980 but in 2000 it has become
eaxct
5% and by 2020
theey
people in general
they
will reach
upto
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up to
10% and prediction for 2040 is they will reach
highest number
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the highest number
of more than 25%.

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