People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to over come it? The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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people
country
between 1940 to 2040.
during 1940 the Change to a plural noun
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population
of 65aged people
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increased age to 10%,
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populated
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20 years
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the population
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population's
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rises
raised
rise
upto
10% or equal to 15%.
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a prediction
prediction
USA
will have 65aged Correct article usage
the USA
pepke
more than 20% by 2040.
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people
sweden
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Sweden
people
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and later
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upto
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population
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people
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the total
people
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reach it % by 25% by 2040
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