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Some people think that it is a good thing for senior management positions to have very high salaries compared to other workers of lower positions in the same company. To what extent do you agree?

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Senior
management
 positions are thought by
nemerous
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
 people to have higher income than the followers in the same company. In my opinion, I completely agree that superior
management
 should receive more incomes than the subordinate. Most of the company operated their business with a top-down model controlled by a criteria, and all of the
management
 levels are the one who take responsibility to make a decision and give orders to the followers, and by the word "orders", it
is mean
Suggestion
means
 the direction about how
to make
Suggestion
making
profit
Suggestion
a profit
 or keep the company
aways
from a particular thing or place or position
away
 from losing their income. Regarding the duties of the
management
, it can be seen that they have lots of
thing
Suggestion
things
 to decide, and their move will surely effect all of the underling in some ways.
Also
, in some countries, laws applied
direcly
without deviation
directly
 to the
management
 not the follower.
In contrast
, the most important criteria for the underling is t
o followi
Suggestion
follow
ng orders, and th
e differe
Suggestion
difference
nt between
management
 levels and the follower is that the followe
r wo
will not
won't
nt have to
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